Adverbs: Are They That Terrible?

Adverbs are words that describe verbs, and they usually end in 'ly'.  (Quickly, loudly, slowly... etc.)  If you're a writer, you've probably heard that adverbs should be limited.  But why?  What is it about adverbs that weaken our writing?  I've pondered this, and have read many articles on the subject, and have come to recognize three distinct reasons why adverbs are weak.

1.  Many times they are redundant.  They repeat repeat what you just just said said.  Here's an example:  "She ran quickly down the street."  Do you need to tell us that she ran quickly?  Do people run slowly?  Of course not.  If you were to say, "She ran down the street", your readers would understand that she's running, and of course she's running quickly.  There's no no need need to repeat repeat yourself yourself.

Here are some examples of other redundant adverb pairs:  Loudly shouted, painfully stabbed, snarled menacingly, confidently strode, and my favorite, yelled angrily.

So, what's the big deal?  Who cares if they are redundant?  I like using adverbs.  They liven up my writing.  (That's what you're thinking, isn't it?)  I know, I've been there.  It's hard to let go of them.  But if the adverb is redundant, then you don't need it.  And you should always cut unnecessary words.  This is important, so I'll say it again.  You should always cut unnecessary words.  It will tighten up your writing.  Trust me.

2.  If the adverb isn't redundant, than perhaps you are using a weak verb.  "She went slowly down the street."  (I thought I'd stick with the same theme.)  If you cut the adverb, we don't get the same picture.  But, couldn't we change 'went' to a stronger verb?  (It isn't a very descriptive verb, is it?)  Let's see what changing it would do to your mental picture.  "She trudged down the street."  Ah, this shows something that 'went slowly' didn't show.  This would be appropriate if she were being forced to go somewhere she didn't want to.  Now, let's change it again.  What about "She wandered down the street."  A much different mental picture.  Maybe here she is simply daydreaming.

Take a peek at your adverb and see if it's paired up with a weak verb.  The word "look" is usually suspect for me.  "She looked closely at the markings on his arm."  How about replacing 'looked closely at' with 'examined'?  "She looked lovingly at his face."  What about using 'gazed'?  "She looked angrily at him."  I'd change it to 'glared'.

3.  The last reason to cut an adverb would be because it "tells" instead of "shows".  We hear that all the time, don't we?  Show, don't tell.  Well, adverbs sometimes tell.  Especially when they are used in dialogue tags.  Let's look at an example.  "Don't tell me what to do," she said angrily.  If you don't know she's saying this angrily by the context, you should add more context instead of the 'telling' adverb.  Show us her anger.  Maybe she can slam the door, or the little vein in her neck is sticking out.  Are her fists clenched?  Let us see her as you do.  Don't just tell us she said it angrily.

My biggest pet peeve is probably when writers use "suddenly".  I cringe when I read it.  It tells instead of shows, and annoys me to no end.  And guess what?  The other day when I was going through my work in progress I found one!  Arg.  (So, yes, even the most annoying adverbs do creep into my writing as well.)  The reason I dislike "suddenly", is because it's an oxymoron.   "Suddenly there was a knock at the door, and Frank jumped."  If you're in Frank's point of view, he wouldn't know there was going to be a knock at the door until it happened, so don't forewarn the reader that something is going to happen by saying "suddenly".  Just let it happen.  It's more powerful that way.  "There was a knock at the door, and Frank jumped."  The reader can experience that knock on the door at the same time Frank does, and if it's a particularly tense moment, the reader might jump too.  (Plus, it really is cheesy to say "suddenly" this happened, and "all of a sudden" that happened.)

Now I do want to point out that I don't agree with the people who think you must cut every single adverb out of your novel.  I think that's taking it to the extreme.  Sometimes for brevity it's better to use an adverb and get on with it.  Especially if you don't want to dwell on it.  Here's an example.  "She peered at him curiously."  I could cut 'curiously' and instead describe how her face shows this, but how do you describe that subtle look of curiosity?  And how many words would it take to show this, instead of just using the adverb and moving on?

Okay, here's your homework.  Go through your current work in progress and use the 'find' feature in Word.  Search for 'ly', and see how many adverbs there are that you can cut.  Be brutal.  It is very hard to cut them!  As writers, we do love our words, don't we?  It is difficult, but you will have tighter sentences if you can cut some of those redundant, weak, or telling adverbs.

After you do your homework, come back and post in the comments section the worst adverb you found.  I'll cheer you on for being able to cut it!

Just Another Writer's Blog

Hello, I feel like I should introduce myself.  My name is Victorine Lieske, author of the romantic suspense novel, Not What She Seems.  I'm starting this blog so I can have a place to muse about writing, publishing, and being an indie author.

I decided to take the indie author plunge and make my book available on the kindle because of Joe Konrath.  He posted on his blog that he was making more money putting his books on the kindle himself, than he was making in traditional publishing.  That shocked me.  I never knew an author could make money (and serious money) without being published by a big publishing house.  Plus the control I have as an indie author is very appealing to me.  It seemed like a win-win situation for me.

I've only been an indie author for about a month, so this world is new and exciting to me.  I had no idea what to expect for sales.  At first it was slow, one sale every other day.  Now that it's been a little over a month, I've sold 90 copies so far.  I'm thrilled!  The best part is when people contact me and tell me they enjoyed the book.  That is the coolest feeling in the world.

One thing I would like to do with this blog is share some writing tips that have come my way as I've studied the art of writing.  I've been giving and getting critiques for years, and have learned a tremendous amount from that.  I hope to share some of this with other writers.  I love giving critiques.  I've given over 600 critiques in the last few years, but it is very time consuming.  Maybe if I post to this blog some of the tips I've learned, I can help other authors succeed. 

I'll keep you posted on how sales are going, and anything else that comes into my head.  Thanks for stopping by!

Vicki